Tuesday, August 17, 2010

Teaser Tuesday!

Andrina's been accused of murdering the king (even though she wasn't on the hunting trip with him). His men disapproved of the marriage, and now that the king is gone, they're free to do with Andrina as they please. So, they've tossed her in a prison.

I've been testing out this idea that she writes a journal while she's in there, because there's not much else to write about. It'll just give a brief overview of what living in a prison is like for her, without the unnecessary narrative.



*SNIP* Thanks for stopping by! :))

10 comments:

  1. Oh wow. This IS GOOD. Sad, because she's being mistreated, but awesome writing.

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  2. Wow, this is very well-written. Her voice is so strong in these journal entries. They really jump off the screen. Poor Andrina.

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  3. I think the length of her entries gives this a nice pacing, you can almost feel her pain. It's interesting how other writers handle the journal format and are still able to get the story across without losing the reader. I'll be stalking your blog for inspiration. :)

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  4. Hi Becca! I’m glad to see you teasing.  I really like this concept of using the journal entries. I’d love to see the progression of the entries mirror her state of mind even more closely as she loses hope (maybe even in length). You might be interested in this short story in the New Yorker where the author did an amazing job at this. http://www.newyorker.com/fiction/features/2009/12/21/091221fi_fiction_simpson

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  5. Wow, I'd love to see more of this. You have a great voice here!


    Maybe they’re attracted to the blood.

    Maybe they’re starving, too.


    SO CHILLING. ♥

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  6. Very nicely done! In just a few words you painted quite a picture of what prison is like for her. Well done.

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  7. Wow, I think the diary format works really well here. This is so incredibly poignant, and thus so incredibly heartbreaking. Amazing.

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  8. Wow, Bex! Those men are so awful spitting on her food!! And the bugs are gross!! When when when will you be done??? <3

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  9. Wow, so sad but written so well! Love it!

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