I really liked this teaser. It cleared up some questions I had even though it was so short. Loved this paragraph, "But it’s as if the world has unfastened before me. Settings and dreams have merged into one, only to be separated by an indistinct line." OHMIGOD, wow.
Haha, AWESOME foreshadowing. The last words should never be said, because you know the moment they do, something bad ALWAYS happens. LOVED the descriptions! MOAR PLZ KKTHXBAI!
The calm before the storm? Hehe, I loved the description in this. It seems like a good lull to slightly relax the tension, but without releasing it entirely - because the reader still gets the sort of foreboding feel from it.
God I'm just so in love with this. I feel like I'm right there, with only a few paragraphs. But it’s as if the world has unfastened before me --- this line is amazing. <3
Even though she says 'all is quiet tonight', I felt tense reading it! Love the writing.
ReplyDeleteI can also totally picture you cackling evilly behind your computer ;)
I'm with Kaitlin - I can see you thrumbing your fingers together like Mr. Burns planning your next attack! LOL!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Jamie and Kaitlin! And then of course you had to add that evil laugh LOL. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteha! before i even read your evil laugh line, i was like yeah, it's quiet now, but just you wait! lol :)
ReplyDeleteThis place sounds beautiful. =) I felt entranced by the place.
ReplyDeleteOoh, what comes next?
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing! And BTW, I gave you an award over at my blog!
You have a way with words! I liked this short but descriptive passage. Nice!
ReplyDeleteNice little description... not too flowery, which is hard to do in a lot of cases :D
ReplyDeleteI really liked this teaser. It cleared up some questions I had even though it was so short. Loved this paragraph, "But it’s as if the world has unfastened before me. Settings and dreams have merged into one, only to be separated by an indistinct line." OHMIGOD, wow.
ReplyDeleteHaha, AWESOME foreshadowing. The last words should never be said, because you know the moment they do, something bad ALWAYS happens.
ReplyDeleteLOVED the descriptions!
MOAR PLZ KKTHXBAI!
The calm before the storm? Hehe, I loved the description in this. It seems like a good lull to slightly relax the tension, but without releasing it entirely - because the reader still gets the sort of foreboding feel from it.
ReplyDeleteCool teaser. Peaceful, yet with a layer of tension. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteSaw you on Lydia's site and thought I'd come over and take a peak! ;D
I felt the tension. All is quiet ... for now? You tease!
ReplyDeleteGreat setting! I wanted to be in the palace too, though.
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God I'm just so in love with this. I feel like I'm right there, with only a few paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteBut it’s as if the world has unfastened before me --- this line is amazing. <3
Loved this teaser! I definitely felt the tension
ReplyDeleteHAHAHAHAHA Loved this!! The tension is so there!! Great work!! :D
ReplyDeleteI love the "settings and dreams have merged into one" part. Wooooo! :D
ReplyDeleteHuge supporter of your work, Shankstaaaaaaah!
*at the ready for more!*