Tuesday, May 4, 2010

Teaser Tuesday!

I really need to get on the ball with this book. I've been taking my sweet time (which isn't a bad thing), but I feel this urge to get it finished.

What takes place in this scene:

Andrina has been on the train from Legora to the New World Kingdom (to meet the King). When it says something about "the riders", it's talking about the Black Riders--the King's personal footmen. I searched and searched for a correct term for these guys, and "footmen" kept popping into my brain. So, I pulled up Wikipedia. Here's what it said:

In a larger household, various footmen may be assigned specific duties (for which there may be a traditional sequence), such as the silver specialist, but usually the footmen perform a range of duties which include serving meals, opening and closing doors, carrying heavy items, or moving furniture for the housemaids to clean behind. The footmen may also double as valets, especially for visiting guests.

Strange, huh? Do you see why I need to finish this book?

On to the teaser...



*SNIP* Thanks for stopping by! :)

19 comments:

  1. WOW! I felt like I was there when I read this. You have done a kick ass job world building! I wanna know what she's getting into!! More please!

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  2. This is a fabulous teaser! Love Andrina's voice and really want to know what happens next.

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  3. Really established voice... it was so easy to believe and experience everything Andrina was!

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  4. wow! you painted such a vivid picture that i felt like i was right there in the scene with your MC! great snip!

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  5. I like the combination of the old-fashioned horseback guards with things like "Metal birds litter the sky, roaring in unison and performing some sort of acrobatic show." It gives this a sort of steampunk feel :) And the descriptions are gorgeous. Makes me wish I could visit the city!

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  6. Wow. Really loved it. I hope you let me beta this once it's done. After all I owe you a beta. :D

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  7. I LOVE this tense. It flows so well and your descriptions are absurdly well done. I'm there, following along, walking right behind your MC. Stop being so incredible, you're making the world jealous <3

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  8. Great writing! The imagery and tone and everything was perfect. I can't wait to read more.

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  9. I love the King's Black Riders. Black outfits, horses. It's got a great mystery about it. A certain strength.
    Nice imagery, too!

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  10. I hope you keep posting pieces about this story! I've been thinking about it since last week! Fascinating world and MC!

    And LOL, at first I thought her last name was snarky!

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  11. LOVE especially that last sentence. It's gorgeous.

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  12. I love, love, love, love, love the voice on this!! Your main also sounds REALLY cool and likeable. Your writing style is wonderful and descriptive enough to pull me in and allow me to see and experience what the character is seeing and experiencing. Also, I like the name Legora.

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  13. WOW. Your descriptions are stellar and I <3 the voice. I agree that you have kick-ass world-building skillz.

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  14. Awesome imagery and voice here, Bex! Plus, I'm with Kaitlin--love the last line! :D

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  15. This is awesome, very descriptive. Can't wait to hear more!

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  16. The voice in this is SO great. And the descriptions are beautiful. I pictured everything super well. <333

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  17. Amazing descriptions. You're so talented! xxx

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  18. Loved the voice and tempo. My favorite line was “Metal birds litter the sky” I really liked that.

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