The end is so sweet! But I get the feeling this scene is the calm before the storm... Reminded me randomly of this scene in Kristin Cashore's Fire when the MC and her friend/love interest person are talking just before a big battle. :)
I like the MC's voice. I want to know what Andy has to convince the king of. I like the name Andrina. It's cool. Is it something you made up? Your writing style is awesome, by the way.
Convince the King of what? I SOOO want to know! Great tease.
ReplyDeleteVery, very interesting. I want so much more of your WiP :))
ReplyDeleteRight blend of internal monologue and dialogue. I like it!!
Pretty! I like the end, especially :)
ReplyDeleteOMG, I would be so nervous. Sounds like something big is up. I'm also curious about the King ;) And ick for cloudy/rainy weather.
ReplyDelete*sighs* Just so you know, I heart this. Wonderful, beautifully written snip!
ReplyDeleteOoh, I want to be whisked off to a world full of young men wanting to meet me! Must know what happens next!
ReplyDeleteVery nice! Love the last paragraph.
ReplyDeleteAwesome snip! I want to know more! Loved the last paragraph :D <3
ReplyDeletePsh, if MC doesn't want guys fighting for her attention, I'll go for her! =) Great snip!
ReplyDeleteAhhhhhh what's next????? You leave me hanging after the body heat paragraph...cruel! ;) LOL
ReplyDeleteLOVE LOVE LOVE IT!
You' re a fantastic writer!
ReplyDeleteGreat vivid imagery. Love the interaction between the two characters.
ReplyDeleteYou leave me with many questions, which is good.
ReplyDeleteI feel a really real connection between these two characters without it ever actually being said. Nice.
ReplyDeletegreat tease! I really like the atmosphere.
ReplyDeleteThe end is so sweet! But I get the feeling this scene is the calm before the storm...
ReplyDeleteReminded me randomly of this scene in Kristin Cashore's Fire when the MC and her friend/love interest person are talking just before a big battle. :)
Convince the king of what? Come on! The suspence! Not fair. Damn you and your delicious teasers :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice dialogue. I like it so far and def want to hear some more!
ReplyDeleteAhh, this is so good! I love the tone here, the quiet of the scene and the dialogue.
ReplyDeleteAnd the last paragraph is just FULL of adorable!!
I like the MC's voice. I want to know what Andy has to convince the king of. I like the name Andrina. It's cool. Is it something you made up? Your writing style is awesome, by the way.
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing. I want to know more! I also love the name Andrina. Very unusual.
ReplyDeleteLOVE <3
ReplyDeleteI need this!!!
Your writing, as usual, is brilliant :)
I love how spare your writing is...really gives everything that much more impact! And, the King? Gulp! :D
ReplyDeleteI like the companionable moment between these two characters. That comes from great description. :)
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue also embraces the reader.
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