The more I read...the deeper I fall! I simply adore this story. And I can't say enough how much I love the present tense. These are some amazing new scenes!
Intriguing scene! I glanced at Annie's comment that said she loves the present tense, and I had to go back and notice it. That means I was too focused on what was happening to notice the tense, which is a big good!
Ah, this is the scene we'd talked about. I love the eerie vibe from it, and the descriptions.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to read more of this. Need to get my arse onto beta reading!!! LOL
I love this scene....it's captivating and strange (but in a good way). Two enthusiastic thumbs up!
ReplyDeleteCandra's voice is amazing. This is a GREAT scene! (Cannot wait to read the whole thing!)
ReplyDeleteOmg this is so exciting. I love your descriptions, I feel like I'm walking down the alley too.
ReplyDeleteThe last line was perfect. I'm really liking SM.
ReplyDeleteVery creepy. Had an "Eyes Wide Shut" feel to it.
ReplyDeleteAnd any one of them can turn me into a toad! LOL!! This is a great scene! Love Candra!!
ReplyDeleteAwesome stuff, I especially loved the descriptions of the men and women.
ReplyDeleteReally good descriptions. Now I'm really curious about what is going on. Keep 'em coming!
ReplyDeleteNice descriptions. The old-fashioned clothing and the masks give this a creepy feel.
ReplyDeleteOoh, very interesting and well written.
ReplyDeleteLove the last line! Very well written. Keep it coming!
ReplyDeletehehe second time I read this today and I still really like it! What a strange place!
ReplyDeleteWhoah. Great last line and general description. I want to read it ;]
ReplyDeleteWhere are we? What's happening? Makes me want to know. I feel a bit disorientated at this weird place -- like the character. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI love it! Brilliant last line! I can't wait to finish reading the whole thing!
ReplyDeleteBecca you're making me want to skip my homework and continue reading SM.
ReplyDeleteI LOVED this scene. Especially the descriptions of what they were wearing and for some reason that last line sent chills down my spine.
Great snip :)
Your descriptions were insane with awesomeness. I want to keep reading!
ReplyDeleteThe more I read...the deeper I fall! I simply adore this story. And I can't say enough how much I love the present tense. These are some amazing new scenes!
ReplyDeleteOooh. So intriguing, Becca!
ReplyDeleteAwesome descriptions and great voice here, Becca! And wow, so weird with the period outfits! Dying to know what the heck is going on! :)
ReplyDeleteIntriguing scene!
ReplyDeleteI glanced at Annie's comment that said she loves the present tense, and I had to go back and notice it. That means I was too focused on what was happening to notice the tense, which is a big good!
Great teaser, Bex! I'd already read this but it has wonderfully awesome description. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat teaser. Love the descriptions and eerie feel. Very well written.
ReplyDeleteLove the creepy feel of this, but that last line made me laugh out loud -- awesome voice in that :D
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