Added a good 3k to TC this past week. Don't know how that happened, since I was going to quit writing for a while. My characters are so annoying sometimes. I even wrote a query letter yesterday within five minutes. What's wrong with me? Anyway, here's a snippet from TC (Logan's POV):
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So sad and poignant. Very good job here!
ReplyDeleteOh, sad! What happened to the dad? I can't believe you wrote a query in 5 minutes--I need lessons! :)
ReplyDeleteI said it yesterday, and I'll say it again. THIS ROCKS!! The last line is pure gold. Please stay with this. I really think you're gonna find you have a heart and the voice for Contemp!
ReplyDeleteI'm ready to Beta when you are!
I really felt for your MC. I liked the contrast between the two memories!
ReplyDeleteI'm so sad for your MC!!
ReplyDeleteI love this line:
No, that night, the cord that connected us had snapped and withered away.
The last line was so beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI love the interactions here - both the good and the bad. So human and so touching.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone else. Very sad. But it also makes me wonder what happened to the MC and the choices he made, and if there were ultimately be some reconciliation. Glad to hear you're still writing.
ReplyDeleteI love your description and how real your writing is, I found myself really connecting with your MC, good job.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness, I love the juxtaposition here of the kid playing football and then him using. And then him thinking about all the things they lost because of this--I'm heartbroken for both the MC and the dad.
ReplyDeleteAwh. his was written beautifully, and it's so sad. Love the little daydream and the interaction between MC and the dad. Great teaser, even though it did make me a little sad :D
ReplyDeleteI'll add another compliment for that last line. Gorgeous. Amazingly well-written teaser. Ilu :D
ReplyDeleteaww this makes me sad. And I have to join the love for the last line! This is why you can't quit even when you want to--you're not meant to!!
ReplyDelete**HUGS**
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome--so well written. You have to keep at it, this is to awesome not to finish :)
So sad but so beautiful! Loved the last line!
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