OOH, I love this...what great descriptions and imagery...I love the last line about the swirling vortex. Awesome! Keep it coming for SM!
I love your dream sequences in SM--the imagery is awesome! Well done!
Excellent imagery!! I love the part about the green and white dots freckling the vision and the swirling vortex of memories. Wow. I can almost FEEL her suffocating!
wow! At first I thought it was a nice dream but I sure was wrong!
OH, I like this! I can see her falling with her hair flying up and then just freezing. And I also love the green and white dots freckle... I love SM!
OMG Becca!Love the imagery. The green & white dots=amazing. And the vortex of bright colors.And the whole thing.
Wow, bizarre & creepy dream. And who's the mystery man?
WOW! Wonderfully written :)Really loved the prose, totally hooked me.
I love this. I can see everything you're describing and it's all pulled together so nice and clean.Great job!
I like how in the very beginning of the passage, I thought it was kind of sexy, and then it turns scary.I love, "Green and white dots freckle my eyesight."I've tried to describe suffocation before, and it's hard! You nailed it.
You did great with the imagery and short sentences when she was choking. Loved it!
Wow, you're awesome at writing dreams!
Your dream sequences are really amazing! Great imagery!
Really amazing, unique descriptions! Loved "green and white dots freckle my eyesight." Green with jealousy wishing I'd thought of that line.
Nice - very creepy. I love the grip he has on her, his strength vs hers.
Who's he?!!? Better not be my boyfriend Ben LOL!!! Because he's to perfect to do something like that. LOLGreat snip :)
Great description! I want to read more :)
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