Okay, time for the witch doctor scene. I call Maggie a witch doctor, but she's really not. LOL!! She's an Ancient (werewolf) who doesn't take sides. Candra and Beth drive over to Maggie's for more answers about the powers Candra will receive on her eighteenth birthday. :)
P.S. -- Sorry so long!! Mine aren't usually this tedious. *sighs*
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LOL Love the Pepto-Bismol pink!! And the last paragraph was definitely creepy!!
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome! I especially liked the gross idea of a smell like grass mixed with blood.
ReplyDeleteOh wow!Very vivid scene! I love reading your writing :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome job!!! I totally get a good vibe when I read SM snippets. I know it's your baby, and I think it shows!!!
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery, and I love the smoker's voice, wispy white haired lady!! Can't wait to read more!!!
This is great! I loved the end of the snip. That totally had me laughing in a freaked out sort of way...
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery here! Fresh blood and grass stew, EW! You really do an awesome job setting the scene and with FPP.
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to read more!
Great voice!! I totally got felt all cold, then warm, in the beginning. So spooky!
ReplyDeleteHaha, "eyes in the back of my head." Nothing scares a kid more. Good job - I'm curious about this battle now.
ReplyDeleteAww, this was FAR from tedious!
ReplyDeleteLoved it; especially the atmosphere that your descriptions and dialogue created.
I really love your writing style! I wish I could read more :)
Love the use of the word flabbergasted. One of my favorites:-) I really want to read more. Great job!
ReplyDeleteLOVE THIS! Sounds like the rewrite of SM is coming along beautifully! :D
ReplyDeleteCreeeepy! But in an oddly good way! Haha! I love your writing! Can't wait to read more!
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