Awesome snip, Becca. There's a lot of subtle hints in this, and I love it in first person present. Great job. :)
Howling dog? Sure... :DOnly part that tripped me was 'She smiles at me'. Yet it said she ignored the PoV character right before that.Other than that, I love it.
Ack! Thanks. I meant for her to say something about ignoring the question. Oops. :) Changed it!
Yay, glad you decided to post teasers again:) I enjoyed it!
lol, Actually I was making a lame joke about it being a werewolf.
Oh, I knew that part silly! I changed the part about her smiling, because she ignored just prior. :P
"It takes two." So true! Spooky ending, I love it!
Well done! I love mysterious houses. And those last two lines you throw in about the dog were great: unexpected, intriguing, very descriptive.
Becca,I love how this is turning out in 1st present! *Is SM #1* I heart Ben!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL
I got the chills at the last part! I usually don't like that, but this was a good kind of spooky. Can't wait to read more!
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Awesome snip, Becca. There's a lot of subtle hints in this, and I love it in first person present. Great job. :)
ReplyDeleteHowling dog? Sure... :D
ReplyDeleteOnly part that tripped me was 'She smiles at me'. Yet it said she ignored the PoV character right before that.
Other than that, I love it.
Ack! Thanks. I meant for her to say something about ignoring the question. Oops. :) Changed it!
ReplyDeleteYay, glad you decided to post teasers again:) I enjoyed it!
ReplyDeletelol, Actually I was making a lame joke about it being a werewolf.
ReplyDeleteOh, I knew that part silly! I changed the part about her smiling, because she ignored just prior. :P
ReplyDelete"It takes two." So true! Spooky ending, I love it!
ReplyDeleteWell done! I love mysterious houses. And those last two lines you throw in about the dog were great: unexpected, intriguing, very descriptive.
ReplyDeleteBecca,
ReplyDeleteI love how this is turning out in 1st present! *Is SM #1* I heart Ben!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL
I got the chills at the last part! I usually don't like that, but this was a good kind of spooky. Can't wait to read more!
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